The Official Writing Challenge
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This is an interesting POV and I enjoyed it, even though I wondered who the narrator was. I enjoyed how your chronically Jesus, life and how the MC questioned things that many still wonder about.

Some of your sentences felt a little awkward. You had a double negative in the second paragraph. A great way to smooth out some of the lines is to have someone read the story aloud to you. If they stumble, you may want to reword that part.

I really like how you took a common theme in this topic and made it fresh and unique by looking at the disciples and using this POV. Nicely done.
I loved it, nicely done. God Bless you~