The Official Writing Challenge
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Date
08/12/11
You painted a good picture of a person falling into a low place in life.

You have several very long sentences, which make the story a little hard to follow. I would separate some of them into two or three sentences.

Good use of words and interesting take on the topic. Nice writing.
Ahh this is the story of far too many people these days. You told it well and there is a great message here.
Ernst's life story is one of redemption and to the glory of God. You told it well. Recovery as described in your story is believable and true. The mechanics of writing will come. Continue writing!