The Official Writing Challenge
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Cute story and very good comparatives in this piece. I enjoyed reading this. "This event comes to my mind every time God calls me to “speak the truth in love (Ephesians 4: 25)” to another Christian." I like the use of scripture and how you showed that we need to be willing to direct and speak up when someone one is going down the wrong path.

One of the sentences needed just a little reworking.-" The other reason was that May was, even though we had a lot of fun and all three enjoyed each other, Van and I were less likely to get into trouble with May around the house."
If you can put spaces in between every paragraph or every few sentences it makes for an easier read.
These are easy to fix. Other than this your story is great. I was entertained and encouraged. Well done! God bless your writing.
This was a fun read and it took me back to my high school days. I love that the car is named after one of my favorite characters, especially because it keeps losing its tail er I mean bumper!

You did commit one of my biggest pet peeves though. In the beginning you say:parents left Van and I. It should be me; to find what's correct, leave out Van. You wouldn't say parents left I.

You have a delightful sense of humor and this was a pleasure to read. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Delightful!
08/14/11
This was so cute, I wanted to join them to frolic in the snow! It was a good read, and had a good message. Nice job.

As for the "spaces between paragraphs" it happened to me once...It was correct when I typed it but transfered to "no spaces" and I was so upset! LOL. So I am thinking you are aware of this and it was an accident too!

Overall adorable and fun story. You are a talented writer, keep on writing. God Bless you~
Fun read. I enjoyed your story. Thank you for the words you shared from the precious Word, "speak every one the truth..." God bless you for your testimony of Jesus Christ and His truth to many He puts in contact with you.:)
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