The Official Writing Challenge
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I like how you shared a snapshot of your life.

Be careful about switching from first person to third. I've done that when I'm telling a true story with a fictional name. But going from I to she will confuse your reader.

I thought it was absolutely precious that the son thought a puddle was the ocean. You had a nice message.
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