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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Much Ado about Nothing (not about the play) (07/28/11)

TITLE: The Wedding Bliss
By Rachael Severa
08/02/11


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Katy has fancied being married all her life. Her childhood journals traced outlines of the perfect ceremony from picturesque Sea Coasts to the announcement of her arrival. With Katy’s designer notes of landscape expressions and her extensive décor of Bridal collections, even Bridesmaid Magazine would take notice.

Every season, as clock work…
Katy’s perusal of the latest designer gowns along with shiny Pearls and Diamond fitted tiaras would be befitting to any first time bride.

Yep! Katy would be “Princess” at her own ball,
Much Ado for Katy’s life …She is yet to be a Bride at all.
Katy makes no excuses for her fashionable presence, contrary to her best friend~ Emma ~ a demure and conscientious observer.
While growing up at “Christian Prep”, Emma and Katy would joke about who would end up being married first. After all, the first married would get bragging right’s, and dibs on bridesmaids dresses as both vowed to never copy the other.

Two days ago, Emma sent word…
She’ll be coming out to visit, no mention as to why, or the sudden purpose. Katy thought this as strange, for Emma is such a planner, “it must be important to have to tell me in person.” This continues to stir in her mind as Emma arrives soon, which is sure to bring Katy a much needed diversion.

Yep! Katy always wanted to be first Bride between them two,
Much Ado for Katy’s life…For Emma may have exciting news!

By the baggage claim Katy waits for Emma. “……Right here” her hand flutters…as if this way, they mince words and a greeting, with an enduring hug. “How are you?” Katy smiles in Emma’s direction, “Seriously”, Emma says, “I thought for sure I was going to throw up my breakfast.”

When Katy heard that she started to ponder, Emma never gets sick she’s used to flying all over. Looking at Emma’s stomach Katy thought, “… but she doesn’t seem to be showing.”

Heading to Katy’s is just a short trip; they both laugh and enjoy the mingling while catching up on what they had missed. They settle into Katy’s posh two bedroom apartment with beautiful crystal and Fine China, and hand made flower ensembles that beautifully coat her house with vibrant shades of Fall Season colors.

[A knock] on the door interrupts their interlude….
“I wonder who that could be.” Katy says curiously, “Oh, I forgot to tell you”, Emma answers with certain, “I bought a dress online, and had it delivered here”.
“You bought a Dress? Oh! How pretty” Katy says with excitement. Emma replies while sizing it, “I’d like to wear it when we go out to dinner tonight. There is a friend I’d like you to meet.” Katy is now in puzzlement as to why Emma is being so discreet.

Yep! Katy questions her being sick and as to, who this friend is?
Much Ado for Katy’s life…Emma may have an answer real quick.


Dinner is reserved to be seated at seven and Katy is curious about this evenings gathering. Waiting in the lounge for their number to blink….Emma meets her friend halfway in the corridor. With an embracing hug and their engaging kiss, Katy’s curiosity fades as it becomes to what this is. And sorrow hurls in for it looks like Emma is in engagement bliss.

As Emma turns to Katy motioning for her presence “Oh…Katy here is Steven, Whom I’d like you to meet” Emma says with such honor, “He lives out here and we met through both of our companies.”

[The blinker just went off]. “Our table is ready,” Katy says without delay.

Now with disappointment, Katy could only say, “So when is the wedding day?
With a confident smile and an added giggle, Emma says to Katy, “My work promoted me, and I’m transferring out here for good.”

A high shout of praise swept the walk way to the table, and Katy’s grin without words joyfully conveys “Wow Emma, I’m so happy that you can finally stay.”

No mention of a wedding, or even a ring, Katy just smiled and looked forward to the following weeks.

Yep! Katy knew what a fool she had been,
Feeling at ease and admiration for Emma just swept in,
She realizes now that she needn’t be first…
Much Ado for Katy’s life…. That worrying about nothing can lead to strife?
For maybe our troubles are Gods’ Blessings in reverse.


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Laury Hubrich 08/04/11
Ahhh, what a sweet story. This is cute. You did a good job.
Anita van der Elst08/05/11
It’s quite apparent you had fun writing this story! I enjoyed the interaction between the two reuniting friends. I’m wondering if the rhyming parts were intentional? For me it interrupted the flow of the story somewhat.
Virgil Youngblood 08/06/11
You did a nice job of building suspense and keeping the reader guessing about the ending. Well done.
Noel Mitaxa 08/07/11
You built the scene and led us well into the story, then threw in a positive twist. Well done.
Colin Swann08/07/11
A good story well written - keep them coming our way. Lovely!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/07/11
This is a sweet story with realistic, believable characters.

I did feel distracted by the elipses bracket and ~ signs. Your writing is strong let it stand on its own. Also double check the rules about using Quotation marks. You needed to capitalize the first words in some and you should use a newparagraph everytime there is a new speaker even if the Quote is one word.

I loved the dialog and how the MC came to terms with being second by the end. For a bit, I thought youmight try a twist ending and have her fix the me up with Stephen. But yay ending was great and it really fit the topic. Nice job!
Andrea Willard08/13/11
The Wedding Bliss is dialogued beautifully. It is a special story.