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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Much Ado about Nothing (not about the play) (07/28/11)

TITLE: The Perfect World
By CrisC Ramirez
07/28/11


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Perfect for the world today
Much ado for technology.
Finding the perfect car,
the perfect house,
the perfect toy,
for your child.

Much ado
For the perfect shirt
with the perfect pants,
with the perfect shoes,
to put on and to impress.

Much ado
For the perfect job,
with the perfect wife,
and the perfect life,
and the perfect love.

All is for nothing
Because He looks not there.
He looks inside
if you helped a friend
in need.
Gave him shelter, a ride
to work, or a toy
for his homeless child.

All is for nothing
because He looks
if you give your shirt off
your back to a neighbor in need.
Offer your friendship
to a single dad who is
need of a job.

All is for nothing--
Did you offer a helping hand
to a wife who needs
your shoulder to cry on
because her child is sick, or
her husbandís infidelity.

So much for our ados
and our perfect little world.
Look outside--
It is why He came!

It is nothing to our Lord.
If you do not use your blessings
for His perfect glory!


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Kathleen Langridge08/04/11
Well written. You made the point very clearly.
Von Pickett08/04/11
I'm not much on poetry, but The Perfect World was very easy to read and understand. I enjoyed it. Should there be "single . . . in need of a job" instead of "need of a job"?
Barbara Mahler 08/05/11
Meaningful words..."Because He looks not there. He looks inside."
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/10/11
Very lovely. You had nice flow and a great message!
James Robbins08/11/11
A very good reminder! Nicely done.