The Official Writing Challenge
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07/15/11
Oh, this is very good... Chilling almost. In a good way. :)

I kept thinking the General was Satan, until his line about their master. You may want to make that a bit more clear if you expand this or post it elsewhere.

Again, a very good job. Similar to Screwtape Letters, but seems a bit more sinister.
07/17/11
I very thrilling ride ... and I agree, chilling as well. You paint very nicely a picture of how we get lulled into complacency and into the atmosphere of "tolerance." I like this a lot!