The Official Writing Challenge
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07/20/11
You make a good overall point about war and peace. I like how the article began and ended.

I think there was room within the story part of this to expound a bit on the events of the day and bring in a needed turning point (e.g. a positive experience by the MC to help transition to the conclusion). Thanks for sharing.
You did a nice job showing how the devil can attack us. I also think it was a nice message, but you didn't shove the message in the reader's face, always a plus for me.

I wish you could open up and share even more of yourself. I have A feeling you have many messages and stories in you just waiting for you to let loose and pour your heart out. That can be a scary thing to do but you are the only one who can tell those stories. Good job.