The Official Writing Challenge
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06/17/11
This is truly a unique take on topic. I love the way you wrote it. Excellent.
06/18/11
Very intriguing story. Well written. I'm wondering who the bag belonged to?
06/20/11
How intriguing!

This definitely reads like a chapter from a larger work--that's both good and bad for the Writing Challenge. It's good, because it has us hanging on every word, but bad because it leaves us frustrated and wanting answers.

Love your little details--the gum, the lamb--very fun to read.
This is a great story. I want to keep reading. I thought maybe the Dad left it for the son to find, but the gum changed my mind. I liked how you blended two version' of checkout into one story.

Congratulations for placing 8th in level one!