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06/16/11
Cute story. I completely relate, as you might see if you read my last name. Can YOU guess how to pronounce it?! It's rarely pronounced correctly and I usually don't say a word about it at places like the grocery store. I'm wondering why most of the story was in italics.
06/16/11
re: italics, I think I messed up when I was putting them in with the 's--something went wrong, because only a few things were supposed to be italicized.
06/20/11
I really enjoyed this change-of-pace story, and your very relatable voice.

A few suggestions about the italics: to end italics, bue sure to type [/i] at the end of what you want italicized. To be sure you've typed it correctly, use the 'preview' button to see your entry before it's made permanent by the 'submit' button. And it's really best not to use your real name, because entries are supposed to be anonymous while they're being judged. Perhaps you could have thought of a different easily-mispronounced name.

This was highly amusing, light, and with a lovely little lesson at the end. I enjoyed it a lot.
06/20/11
This was a cute story and you did a good job with the humor. I wonder if it might have grabbed my attention more quickly if you had started with the clerk saying the name wrong. Then you could have said why it doesn't feel personal, although you made that point well, at the end. Who hasn't heard of Moses?
06/20/11
We bought our house from a Mr. Moses, my kids loved it! Because of the Bible story:) I enjoyed your story. I never like being called by name either, unless I actually know the person.