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06/17/11
The road to Emmaus sounds like a wonderful experience. I get the impression that you, the author, are as passionate about it (and seeing women of faith encouraged) as your character is. Well done.
06/17/11
I like this road to Emmaus idea. Sometimes it's good to leave everything behind and get away for a while.

The only thing that threw me a little was some of the switching back and forth from past to present tense.

Other than that, I find it to be very well written and informative. Thanks for sharing.
06/20/11
I really felt for this young woman and her stresses--you portrayed them well.

Beth's longish speeches felt to me like commercials for Emmaus--I wanted to get to know these characters and their circumstances better, instead.

The first few paragraphs really drew me in--well done.