The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a deeply moving story. It has great potential to shine a light on the plight of child soldiers that are abducted in so many counties at war.
Try reading your work out loud to learn where sentences can begin and end. I wanted to read the story so I stuck with it but several times I got lost.
You have described the feelings of the boy very well. Look into the meanings of telling versus showing. It would take this to a first place piece. Be encouraged.
06/12/11
You packed a lot into this. It sounds interesting, but is a little hard to follow. It might help to break it up into smaller paragraphs to keep the reader from getting lost in all the details.
This is a powerful story. I enjoyed your message.
In short stories shorter paragraphs often help the reader to not feel overwhelmed. I also noticed in the beginning you used bear instead of bare.

But those are little details, you described the horror of war with vivid detail. I can only imagine to survive such sights would be to look for a better tomorrow.