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You did an "outstanding job on this ons. The suspense was intense, As someone who suffers severe chronic pain I can relate, but now I try to keep going because if I give up everything I taught my kids about perseverance and they can do anything would have been a lie. That's the last way I'd want my kids to remember me as a liar. Great job on a difficult topic.
The beginning of this was quite intense and really pulled me in, the last part was much more mellow - putting them together was sort of like taking a quick breath and letting it out, nice and slowly. At the end I felt relief that the man came back, yet mixed with wondering if he will he make the necessary change.

There was a little confusion in the beginning, with the switching of verb tenses between past and present. Other than that, it was a riveting and easy read.
An intense story that pulls the reader in immediately. Thanks for sharing. God bless!