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This is a great story, especially today when parents can get a tad crazy over a Little League game. I liked how you left the story open-ended. Besides Eric if there was a runner on first and it was an infield fly ball then the infield rule goes into effect and the batter would be out anyway. Sorry I used to ump baseball games and got carried away there for a minute as your story took me back to those wonderful summer days.Great job!
You did a great job encapsulating the "outlook" idea in a fly ball, and kept me wondering up to the end what the outcome would be. The idea of imagining two different scenarios, one positive and other other negative, is the realistic that keeps the reader going to the end.
This delightful story took me back to my son's Little League days. What fun! But I also remember how nerve-wracking for my son and for me. LOL Loved the story and the good message tied in at the end. God bless!
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