The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a great story from the title to the very end. I was hoping the MC would stick around for a while. Nice job.
06/12/11
I really like this, and can really relate. Every article I start off reading thinking "do I want to stick with this or not?" I'm glad I stuck with this. You can really feel what the character is feeling as you read. Great job!





06/12/11
Fine work in catching the realistic inner dialog of the main character.

The ending seemed a little too sudden.

I sense that shorter paragraphs could help slow the pace.

Gutsy story!
06/13/11
I'm glad to see a writer willing to address the reality of evil forces in our lives. You did a great job connecting the horrible impact that has in people's lives and the resulting pessimism toward God's loving presence in our lives.
06/13/11
Wonderful story and cleverly written. I loved it from start to finish! Good job! God bless!
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