The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a great story from the title to the very end. I was hoping the MC would stick around for a while. Nice job.
I really like this, and can really relate. Every article I start off reading thinking "do I want to stick with this or not?" I'm glad I stuck with this. You can really feel what the character is feeling as you read. Great job!

Fine work in catching the realistic inner dialog of the main character.

The ending seemed a little too sudden.

I sense that shorter paragraphs could help slow the pace.

Gutsy story!
I'm glad to see a writer willing to address the reality of evil forces in our lives. You did a great job connecting the horrible impact that has in people's lives and the resulting pessimism toward God's loving presence in our lives.
Wonderful story and cleverly written. I loved it from start to finish! Good job! God bless!
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