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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Sellout (05/26/11)

TITLE: Who Can You Trust?
By V. Joy Ocasio


“I can NOT believe you!” Apryl screamed. “We had a deal. I make all A’s, you buy me two tickets to the concert. Now you’re saying you can’t do it. You are not keeping your end of the bargain. I should have just flunked Chemistry.”

“Are you done freaking out?” Mom asked.

“No, I am not!” She made sure her the look on her face said that they were not done talking about this. “We are not done talking about this,” She said a moment later. Just in case the look hadn’t gotten the message across.

“Apryl, honey, I’m sorry. We made that promise before your father lost his job. We need to keep the money we have for bills and food. I really am sorry. When we get back on our feet, we’ll buy you the tickets.” Mom said all soothingly.

“But I won’t be able to go then. The tour will be over next month.” She whined.

“Then we will wait until the next tour and buy you tickets then. But we can’t get you any tickets now. End of story.” Mom said with a firm look on her face.

“Whatever.” Apryl said and stormed off.

A few hours later Apryl sat in her room. She was online and looking at the website for the band she wanted to go see. She huffed and she puffed as she looked at the pictures. At the moment, feeling sorry for herself seemed like the best idea. She clicked on another link and another. Soon she was on the page for buying tickets online. She looked though all the information and her cursor hovered over the buy now button. In a flash she leapt to her feet and ran for her purse. In her wallet was the credit card her parents had given her on her sixteenth birthday. It was only for emergencies or previously approved purchases.

Well, this was a previously approved purchase. Why not?

Apryl hit the buy now button. She entered in all the credit card information. She was about to finalize her purchase when she heard it.

“You can not just walk out on us.” She heard her mother say.

“I just need some time to think, to get my focus back. I’ll be back soon. I’m just going to visit an old college buddy.” Her father said.

“John, we barely have money to buy groceries. Apryl has no idea how serious our money problems are right now. We need you here. You need to find another job. I need to find a job. I can’t do this by myself.” Mom was reaching the begging point.

“I’m sorry, Jane. But I have to go. My cab is here. I’ll be in touch.” Her father’s deep voice replied.

“John, please.”

Her mother’s plea was cut short by the click of the door.

Her father had just left them.


Probably for good.

Apryl could hear her mother’s soft sobs. Reality washed over her. Her father had just sold them out. She looked back at her computer screen. There was no way she could sellout her mother by buying these tickets.

Apryl could hear her mother’s prayers. Apryl looked at the ceiling. “God, I hope You’re not a sellout. We’ve got enough of those.”

Apryl started toward the bedroom door to go comfort her mother. But she stopped right at the door as she heard her mother. “You, God, You will not leave us in this trial. You will guide us through. I don’t know how. I don’t understand. I just know that at the very least, I can lean on You.”

Well, there was her answer.

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Phee Paradise 06/02/11
Apryl is a typical teenager who learned an important lesson. It was refreshing to watch her turn away from her rebellion. Nice ending.
Kathleen Langridge06/03/11
In these hard economic times a story that is all too real but also a story of hope.
Roxanne Howard06/04/11
Really loved this story and was definitely looking for more to resd. Very Good
Leola Ogle 06/04/11
Apryl's dialogue was so realistic of a teen. A powerful story about the effects of the economy on many families. God bless!
Nigel Byng06/06/11
I love rebelious teenagers as characters. Loved Apryl a lot. Your story ended too soon though. Ah well, guess I have to look forward to more of your writing then. Great Job
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 06/06/11
This is outstanding. The best thing that could happen to Apryl was for Dad to lose his jobs. Patents have raised a me generation a sense of self-entitlement. But then the father wasn't the best example. This story brought tears to my eyes as it plays out in many homes. Outstanding job!