The Official Writing Challenge
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I loved this story so much that I feel bad saying this comment but with the passion I see I want to see you going in completion within every aspect, so...

My only critique would be to extend your use of different punctuation marks. I'm not perfect at it either but a comma or semi-colon here or there would've helped the flow a bit. Some of your sentences seemed cut by the periods but, again, it was still an awesome read.
Touching story. It was formed well especially with the ending. Keep sharing your heart as God gives you open doors.
06/04/11
Oh my, I really felt this story! Thanks for sharing. Good writing! God bless!
06/06/11
The beauty of the Master's work in your life thus far is revealed in this compelling narrative. I think you should expand on this and continue to share your story. Lovely story. Keep up your work and God bless.
I've suffered depression as well and am grateful that as much as I tried to take control God wouldn't let me. He had plans for me. I liked how you slipped in different definitions of sellout and wove them together in one beautiful piece!