The Official Writing Challenge
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05/26/11
Nice writing. Nice poetry! Thanks for sharing.
05/27/11
You know, your last stanza is so very profound and completes your poem beautifully! "The love that fills the soulís innermost wish -- Is perfect, amazing complete and truly outlandish"
I remember being a kid and it was all over the news that on such and such a day the world would end. Mom comforted me by telling me thatpeople have been doing that so many tines and only God knows. It's a nice reminder how arrogant the human race is.

A bit of red ink-in the second paragraph you used has instead have. A trick I use is to take out the words in between the subject and verb. You wouldn't say I has seen. It's an easily fixed mistake.

You really did a beautiful job coming the lovely poem with the story that we can all relate to. Nice job!
05/29/11
Good job! God bless!