The Official Writing Challenge
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05/19/11
A great story, and well written.
This is very inspirational and an interesting read as well.

Be careful with little errors like strait instead of straight thru for through and there for their. It may seem petty but little spelling, punctuation and grammar mistakes can be distracting.

You have a natural art of storytelling. Some of your lines felt poetic. Keep writing from your heart.
05/24/11
I really like your main character. Too many people take for granted those who speak in quiet ways and lead by actions.

Very good storytelling ability. Keep up the good work.