The Official Writing Challenge
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05/19/11
Isn't it wonderful that our work for God will never end? So sorry about the strokes, but there is no better plan than Gods. Keep trusting-and writing, and giving Him praise. Good job!
05/20/11
The presence of the angels brought a great sense of peace into this entry detailing lots of chaos. I can imagine, asuming the story is nonfiction, these angels also brought a great sense of peace into the real life scene of chaos.

My favorite phrase: Vanity dies hard sometimes, even in cloudy realms of nearby death.
05/20/11
Great descriptive phrases. You could really feel the transcendence of angels in the room.
Loved this, we never know what the person on the bed is actually feeling or going through. Sorry about the strokes, but God has turned them to Good. God Bless you and keep writing.
You have been used by the Lord and are now. Praise God! Your story(testimony) of your ordeal and how God encompassed His angels around you shows how He gives us peace and promise during our unexpected situations. You may feel that you are a drop out from college but sometimes it is just a change of plans that God allows for His purpose.
Remember this, you are a trooper in the army of the Lord. Salute!! God bless you and keep on sharing what the Lord has given you. This ministered to me in so many ways! Thank you so much. I'll keep praying for your strength too.
05/26/11
well done on the3rd place. :-)
Congrats hon on your win! Well done! Keep on sharing your gift and your heart. Thank you again for writing this, it really blessed my heart.
This story show what a strong and devoted person anyone are. God obviously had bigger plans for you than college. Great job
05/27/11
Congrats on taking 3rd place with this inspiring entry. Your description of peace brought by the angels presence brought a sense of calm to this whole piece. The MC bloomed where God planted her--and experienced His blessings. Keep writing!
I enjoyed reading this story very much. The flow was excellent, well paced, unrushed. My favorite lines:
- I was attached to numerous machines but I was too tired to care, too tired to speak, almost too tired to live.
- a ride that went from a discouraging disruption to a dance with death.
- I could see them with the eyes of my heart as I breathed ‘Jesus’ in and breathed ‘Jesus’ out.
- Almost 22 years later with 2 additional strokes I am still a college dropout yet a qualified servant of God, no diploma needed.

I love your words choice, Kathleen; excellent.

Thank you for sharing.

rahartati