The Official Writing Challenge
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05/08/11
You described an awkward situation well. But I found the ending a little disappointing. The problem didn't really have a resolution. On the other hand, it made me wonder.
05/10/11
That certainly was awkward! I hope he got the message :)
It's always hard to know what to do in a situation like that. You did a great job with the characters characters and showing the smell in the small car (showing smell is not easy to do.) Perhaps real people who find themselves in that situation could leave a nice gift basket with soap, towels deodorant and shampoo along with some other fun items. nice job. It was an enjoyable read and I was delighted I wasn't in the car too. :)