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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Blowout (04/28/11)

TITLE: The Blessings of a Son
By Wilma Schlegel
05/04/11


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A-top swirls of icing
one candle shines bright.
Tickles, giggles and kisses
and presents so right.
He reaches to hold
the light in his hand,
ďBe careful, son, thatís
not a good plan.Ē

Now heís much smarter,
he has five burning lights.
Heíll have piggy-back rides
and laughter all night.
He wants ice cream and cake
and playing and wishes
And he loves you so much
that he helps with the dishes.

His birthday again
ten flames to blow out.
He completely enjoys
what his birthdayís about.
Friends and games, lots of fun
His brother to chase
and marble cake is his favorite
he canít wait to taste.

Sixteen birthday candles
for him to blow out.
This day is so special,
Now, heíll drive all about.
Donít worry Mom,
please donít be scared
Youíve taught me so well,
Iíll drive with Godís care.

Seventeen birthday candles
are easy, says he.
He can still blow them out
on the count of three.
He loves birthdays, theyíre great,
a gift from above
Thank you, God, for my family,
friends and your love.

Now blow out eighteen,
youíve done all the others.
Weíre proud of you son,
weíre proud of you brother.
We know youíll do well
at whatever you choose
because we believe
the Lord is with you.


Nineteen birthday candles
for you weíll blow out.
The crash was so senseless,
we canít figure it out.
Why our son? Such a treasure,
such potential, such love.
We know where he is,
but itís so far above.

Help us to forgive,
understand and to heal.
Help us to love
he who had the wheel.
Our son was a gift,
he brought light from above.
He helped us to know
so much about love.

We thank you, dear God
for the candles each year.
They marked off the time
our son spent with us here.
Though their flames were blown out
with the puff of a breath.
The blessings of a son
were not stilled with his death.


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Caitlin Dea05/08/11
Good Job on this nice poem! I loved the meaning for blowout used here. Different from the rest of the entries. Very good, very emotional.
Don't know why this hasn't been commented on so far. :) Thanks for sharing.
Joanne Sher 05/09/11
What a beautiful and bittersweet piece. Great imagery, and what a message.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/10/11
This is so touching and a beautiful tribute. I'm sure every parent who has lost a child that reads this touching rhyme will have bittersweet memories pouring out.

It's hard to give red ink because this is obviously from your heart, but I did notice you rhymed love and above several times.

It's hard to describe such intense feelings a parent has for a child but you did a lovely job. Thank you for sharing.
diana kay05/11/11
wonderful.... great use of the theme and a poignant story within the poem.I can relate to it having lost my eldest daughter at the age of only 17.
you have done it beautifully tenderly and with warmth. The use of the birthday a=candles to denote the passing of the years is clever.
Jennifer Hill05/11/11
I thought of using birthday candles too-for blowing out:) anyways, I enjoyed your story-I have three sons, 9,11 and 13-so the ending tore at my heart.
Caitlin Dea05/13/11
congrats on placing at your level...

Keep writing :)
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/13/11
Congratulations for placing 10th in level one!