The Official Writing Challenge
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05/05/11
praise:This sounds almost like a journal entry :) Sounds like a nice vacation. The little inconveniences don't matter when we are having an adventure

red ink: the first sentence was a little confusing to read.

Good job :D
05/08/11
Sounds like quite the adventure. Memories like this are wonderful. Thanks for sharing.
05/10/11
great story and some great description very colorful.

I think maybe using the past tense for this tale would have been better than writing it mostly in the present tense.