The Official Writing Challenge
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05/05/11
Very well written - but a little sad. The plot is just a tad overdone with so many animal tragedy stories. Just my opinion. Overall well done. :)
05/07/11
an interesting subject for a story. I did find the jumping backwards and forwards in the narration a bit intrusive and it might have worked even better if you had either used italics for one of the threads or just retold it as a story.
You rite th affection and have chosen a good subject with the theme.
05/11/11
This story made me want to cry. You did a great job with the suspense. In my book, it's a winner.

The only thing that threw me was the repetition of the "thirtyfive years before." The second mention made me think the first "thirtyfive years before" was present tense.

But that sort of thing is easily fixed. On the whole, wonderful story. Enjoyed it very much.
05/13/11
congrats on placing at your level...
Keep writing!
Congratulations for placing 9th in level one!