The Official Writing Challenge
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This could be the body of a good devotion with a scripture verse and a prayer.

I liked how you shared a part of yourself. I remember when I focused on trying to be perfect it led to a pretty severe eating disorder. I had to settle for doing my best while trying to remember that my best may change from moment to moment. You've done a good job of hitting on something many people can relate to.

The last paragraph felt a tad preachy to me but if that's not what you want you can easily fix it by keeping it in the first person like you did for the rest of it.

You have passion in your words and it's clear you want to spread the love of Jesus to others. Keep writing, don't get discouraged, (as a former perfectionist I understand how very hard that is to do!) and you will keep improving.
05/02/11
Loved the theme of this piece, as I think many of us don't enjoy the journey while waiting on perfection!

I believe with a little clean up with spacing that this would make a great devotional. Keep up the outstanding effort!