The Official Writing Challenge
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How sad that in 50 years or so bullying has gotten worse over the years. I wish the teacher would have gotten involved before he knew Winston's father died. At first he seemed he was just telling his mom to socialize him more and didn't take action until he felt bad that his father died. We all need to act right away. Nice message.
04/30/11
This is a precious story. My favorite line is: "His class work was above average; he was a Bluebird in reading. Of all the names he was called, no one called him stupid." That shows us a lot. I would encourage you to rework the ending. You are in "telling" mode and I think the baseball game speaks for itself. It shows us what this kid is made of.

05/15/11
You had me so involved in Winston's life. I was glad the gym teacher was willing to get involved. I enjoyed your story and am challenged by your message. Thanks!