The Official Writing Challenge
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The title drew me in as I enjoy things theatrical. I really liked the gist of this story and I can see a gift for story telling. Had trouble following the dialogue, as to who was saying what. But itís an easy fix with the proper use of quotation marks and a few commas.
05/03/11
You kept my attention hoping for Gloria to get at least one good review. Loved the ending. Good job.
This is a sweet story-Ifound myself holding my breath hoping she'd get at least a constructive critique. Even if others don't like our work, if we learn from it we still walk away a winner.

On that note I do have some red ink for you, make sure you put quotation marks around the speaker's words and you could put the critics' words in italics.

You did a nice, job with this story I'm sure many writers can relate.