The Official Writing Challenge
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04/21/11
Very sweet, very nice, very moving.
04/22/11
This is beautifully written but oh very sad. The red ink I would offer is Mommies should be Mommy's (if there is one or Mommies' if you're referring to several.) This really tugged at my heart because I know as I read this a similar scene has played out in real life. I hope your message gives even one abused woman the strength to get help. You write as if you've experienced this yourself, if so know I just prayed for all of the abused Mommies.
04/24/11
the contrast between the sleepng children and the second part of the poem is striking. You capture it so well.
04/28/11
Congratulations for ranking 9th in level one!