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I can really recognize the characters in this story. Glad Tony had a change of heart; it's tough to persuade a controlling person to let someone else have input. But the way you explain it through dialogue makes a lot of sense. Thanks for this!
wonderful example of show rather than tell. The dialog conveys a very realistic story that touches all of us in one way or another. Great job!
I can relate to Tony. It has taken me many years to let go of the control issues and pride as well. This was a great dialogue.
There are a lot of Tonys out there who could benefit from this little story. I can picture it as a skit too. Nice job.
You did a great job conveying this familiar situation with a great resolution. I agree that this could be a great skit. Thank you for sharing.
Really enjoyed this. You're descriptions through dialogue really drew me into the story...and the lesson. Good job!
Good story. Nice flow, good dialogue. Your point was made very effectively. It might have been better to stay completely in Tony's POV (John “almost threw his pie at him”), but that's a small thing, besides, it was a great line. This was a well written, interesting story with a good point made. Thank you!