The Official Writing Challenge
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04/22/11
i found this piece really interesting and i would have LOVED to know more. the MC was in a new role but what had she done before?you describe well the conversations and the challenges this person had to face.
I really enjoyed reading it :-)and a good use of the theme
04/25/11
I enjoyed your story telling and dialogue, but I didn't realize the narrator was a woman until the end of the story. I was also a little confused at the beginning about the circumstances. But I loved the narrator's response about women's activism.
Very well writtern!!
Facinating story. I, too, would love to hear more about this missionary.
04/26/11
This is a unique take on the topic. Work on more showing and less telling in the narrative. For example, if the luggage is being dragged, the reader can figure out that they people are tired and their bags are heavy. Overall, an interesting story. Good job.
04/28/11
I enjoyed this! I agree with the others who commented they'd like to read more. The MC is delightful. Thanks for sharing.
This was a lovely story. I smiled at the feistiness of the MC. Great job!