The Official Writing Challenge
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04/18/11
A touching story...(sorry about the pun)
Leave an extra line between paragraphs to make it easier to read - a common problem for beginners.
Good use of dialogue!
04/20/11
Good story. It kept me interested to the end. I like the interaction between mother and daughter. Thank you.
04/20/11
I liked your dialogue too. You used it to tell us the story and emotions of the characters, instead of just narrating.