The Official Writing Challenge
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04/14/11
You have quite a flair for dramatic language! Interesting concept.
04/20/11
some very dramatic writing here. i liked the descriptions but for some reason it seemed like a series of sentences rather than flowing together. I am not an expert at all and so cannot say why it felt like that. maybe some linking words are needed.
do keep writing as i think there is much potential
04/20/11
Lots of great descriptions! Good command of language. Youíve brought up a concept that is important to teach and understand. I think a personalized story would have more impact on the reader. More showing, rather than telling.
04/20/11
You used vivid descriptions that helped me see the hate that caused the church to burn, But if they couldn't kill Jesus, burning a church won't destroy him either. Maybe showing how it affected you might help you connect with more readers. You have a lotof talent and your passion for God is clear. Keep writing.
04/20/11
Excellently written. I could picture it all. Good job.