Hire
Writers
Editors
Home Tour About Read What's New Help Forums Join
My Account Login
Shop
Save
Support
E
Book
Store
Learn
About
Jesus
  

Win A Publishing Package HERE            

The HOME for Christian writers! The Home for Christian Writers!
The Official Writing Challenge

BACK TO
CHALLENGE
MAIN

INSTRUCTIONS

how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level

ENTRIES

submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners



Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.





TRUST JESUS TODAY

TRY THE TEST



Share
how it works   Submit

Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Flowers (10/03/05)

TITLE: Keep Safe the Garden.
By Alexandra Wilkin
10/10/05


 LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE
 SEND A PRIVATE COMMENT
 ADD TO MY FAVORITES

Buried deep within the dark and furtive soil,
Of our imagination,
The sharp seed lies where sunís light
Cannot reach it;
So I must ponder upon what feeds
That fatal, poisoned seed.

I hear fear drenched words of vengeance,
Unstoppable, carelessly seeping,
Reaching to the seeds straining to release
Violent burning shoots;
Clamouring to reach the earth, and strangle
Beauty flowering still.

I desire to hoard the flowers safely away
From grasping tentacles,
So sift the earth through my fingers
Again, then again;
Searching through the dank soil for that
Kernel of pain.

As the soil imprints upon my palmís pattern
I see others,
Thrusting bulbs haphazardly into the soil unknown,
And I know;
Their anticipation will wilt in springís dawn
As weeds grow.

They laugh at my superstition as they
Blame irregular seasons,
But steadfast I shall sift the earth,
And sift again;
Planting certain roots in nurtured earth, waiting
For winterís end.

For what I seek in sifting is
Edenís richer soil,
The brighter endless day wherein the shadows
Cease their toil;
Where free the roses fuller grow, the
Vineyard brightly blossoms.

Where Grace is beauty and my soul
Need not strain,
To hear my Lord and saviourís call:
ĎArise, my love Ė
Come sing, for summerís home and we
Rise joyfully above!í


The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be right now. CLICK HERE

JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.


This article has been read 1049 times
Member Comments
Member Date
Debbie Sickler10/10/05
I really liked this! I'm sorry that I don't know much about poetry, to be able to give you an educated critique, but I can say that I thought the wording in this was beautiful. I found myself wanting to reread it several times to get the full meaning of each line.
Phyllis Inniss 10/10/05
This poem is just beautiful.
Anita Neuman10/10/05
I love this! So lyrical and rich, and it just builds and builds towards that glorious last verse. BEAUTIFUL JOB!
Julianne Jones10/13/05
Beautifully descriptive piece that imprints image after image on the reader's mind. I loved it! Well done.
darlene hight10/13/05
I loved this the words are very powerful and descriptive. It builds beautifully to a peak. I found the word 'sifting' to be especially strong and if I have a suggestion for improving it would be to lace that through the entire piece also I think that I wanted more of a hint where we were heading toward the beginning. The flow of this poem is awesome and the message- perfect!
Suzanne R10/13/05
Very beautiful. Like others have said, the imagery, the main idea of getting rid of the weeds - returning to the way we were created to be - just beautiful.
Pat Guy 10/13/05
Beautiful Ali - just beautiful.
Jan Ackerson 10/13/05
Very nice; I especially like the image of sifting and sifting again. Unique and visually satisfying. (I wish I could write free verse!)
Garnet Miller 10/13/05
Nice imagery. We are like those seeds- some withering, some choked by the "weeds of life", some poisoned by their own vices, and some that grow under the Savior's protection.
Brandi Roberts10/13/05
This is a beautiful bit of poetry! Thanks for sharing!
Debbie OConnor10/13/05
I think this is wonderful. Thank you for sharing it. Beautiful work!
Joanne Malley10/13/05
You have talent for poetry! Very nicely done. :)
Laurie Glass10/13/05
Nicely written. You have a flare for writing poetry.
Crista Darr10/13/05
Wow Ali, this is fantastic! I hope you have a winner here. The imagery and the rhythm are great.
Linda Watson Owen10/13/05
I too especially like the recurring sifting image! The last statement is a fitting crown for the poem too! Well done!!
Cassie Memmer10/13/05
Yes, its not enough just to grow where planted, but must work to run the race set before us. To become what He wants us to be. Free to bloom. Very nice work!
Val Clark10/15/05
the fascinating thing about good poetry is how everyone see something different in it! Well done. I particularly liked the first and the last three stanzas. Yeggy
Shari Armstrong 10/16/05
A very nice poem
Deborah Porter 10/17/05
Ali, congratulations on your 3rd Place in the Level 1 awards, as well as your 7th Place in the Editors' Choice. Both very well deserved. Wonderful to see poetry placing quite often these days - and wonderful to see your poem in the winner's circle.

Time to move up to Level 2 Ali! You're ready.

Love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)