The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked how you did this. If your changed the adults to children It could be a perfect? storybook to explain eternity to kids. You could leave the dream sequence out too because kids can see things we can't. I also have a special ornament from my mom that I keep out all year. It's a Santa kneeling by Baby Jesus. Great story.
03/18/11
Creative and entertaining piece of writing.
03/20/11
I loved your "out of the box" illustration with the Christmas ornaments and the clown. Very unique approach. Also, "letting go of the 'old' and believing a 'new' thing would be better," makes me think of the contrary religous beliefs about getting into heaven, and not accepting the Lord, Jesus. Using the newly married couple was a great way to use all of this. Your story was strong but would read better without some of the tags.
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