The Official Writing Challenge
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Well written and very suspenseful. Your words captured my attention from beginning to end. I have been trapped in an elevator, so I have a slight fear of them anyway. The ending was surprising, but it really was a good way to sum up the truth. I liked the added humor, The only one I'm going to trust is General Electric.

This is one of my favorites for this week.
Wow!!! I am jealous. This is a 'master' read. I laughed about the "General Electric", and grieved for Derrick as the doors shut in his face. This is a powerful, grim reminder of the realities of rejecting our Saviour's work on the cross. Beautifully done.
Wow! Your ending took me by surprise. I was remembering the time I was stuck in an elevator with a ten-year-old boy who kept yelling, "I can't breathe. I think I'm going to die." Great writing; very original.
great story. loved the character and clever ending a funny, original story with a serious undertone
You did a great job with the dialog and characters It felt so suspenseful and I felt sad for the boss.If only he had believed and asked Jesus to forgive him. If only...
well done lori onwards and upwards!!
Wow. This is good! I was definitely not expecting the ending. But it works! Good job on this one. :)
Derrick's voice was so aunthentic in representing non-believers. My heart grieves for those who won't accept Jesus as their Savior. Your message comes across beautifully as you bring this entry to its conclusion. Congrats on winning with this one.