The Official Writing Challenge
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03/17/11
Excellent wake up call to all who read your poem.
03/20/11
thank you i like the title and you have added thought provoking content to the poem. As there is such alot of thought provoking refelction in this i wonder if it would have worked even better if you had added a space between every 2 lines to allow the reader to naturally pause in the reading.
This is a lovely poem with many great points. Try breaking it up into verses so that there is more white space and is easier on the eyes. Well-done, lovely piece