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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Eternity (03/10/11)

TITLE: The Old Man
By Ken Ebright


What's worse being homeless on this earth, or being homeless from heaven and spending eternity in hell?

Shirley, a volunteer from, Caring hands, Caring Hearts Ministry, did what was called night patrol. She would look for homeless people and try to bring them to a shelter. It was a cold night, where the temperature was around zero, around midnight she saw an old man with grey hair, and a grey beard, in a sleeping bag, which was under the 34th street bridge.

Shirley tapped the old man on the shoulder, "Sir, I am from Caring hands, haring hearts. I can help you find a place to stay tonight."

The old man turned over and looked dazed and confused.

"Get away from me; I don't need your help."

Shirley knelt down beside the old man. "What's your name? I want to help you."

"My name is Ralph. Help me with what!" He spouted angrily.

Shirley smiled, "My car is over there. I can help you find shelter. I really do want to help you."

Not knowing he could trust this woman, he stared at her for a minute, and then finally said. "Okay."

Ralph had a hard time getting up, finally he did pick up his sleeping bag, and they walked over to the car and got in. Shirley started it and put it into gear.

Shirley concentrated on staying on the road. "We do more than just help people who are homeless. We help people find their heavenly home. Do you know Jesus?"

Ralph laughed, "Why would I want Jesus? I'm homeless. Jesus certainly has not done anything for me."

Shirley smiled, "Oh yes he has, he put me in your life. I can help you get you back on your feet and help you find an earthly home. I can also help you not to be homeless from your heavenly home. That way you can spend eternity with him. You will never have to worry about being homeless again."

"I don't know about this Jesus."

"Jesus loves you he can really help you. He can change your life."

Ralph shook his head, "I don't know. I just don't know."

As they neared the shelter, Ralph screamed, "I want to get out, I donít want your help."

"Ralph, you canít continue to live like this; I can help you get you life back together Please trust me." Shirley stopped in front of the shelter.

"No one can ever help me, donít wast your time on me." Ralph opened the door and ran and was never seen by Shirley again.

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Bonnie Bowden 03/17/11
I loved the sensitivity and caring you used in the story.
Homeless people are really afraid of others. Many have been taken advantage of or feel unworthy of any type of love.

There was one small typo; I think you meant caring not haring, but this did not detract at all from the ideas or flow of the story.

Great job.
D.A. Urnosky03/18/11
I liked the idea that you didn't follow through with a storybook ending and ending on a sad but very realistic point. Well done.

Please read over you story carefully before submission. There were quite a few sentences that the sentence stucture wording was out of order or had too many words.
diana kay03/20/11
good story and illustrates well can only invite and care and love we cannot drag anyone into the kingdom of heaven. I think it is sad that by refusing the gospel of eternity this person also refused the bed for the night as well. I cant help thinking if the MC had taken her task one little step at a time and gained the old mans trust at first the outcome might have been different but lets hope there is another chapter to this story :-) I liked it very much
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/21/11
You did a nice job showing how often people dose the door to heaven without realizing it and that's much more important to show people than to have a happy ending.