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03/11/11
Nice twist to the story's end. Be sure to use comma's when necesssary.
This is a cute piece with an interesting POV. I missed how it fit in with the topic, but I've had that happened before and then reread at and it dawned on me. Keep writing you have a nice sense of humor.
I did reread it and saw you used the word minute several times and realized the flashbacks were of minutes, so it does kind of fit the topic but I think with more words, you might have an even better story. Keep at itm (also double-spacing between the paragraphs makes it easier to read):)
03/12/11
Very cute piece. Had me wondering for a bit. Good job
03/12/11
Very cute piece. Had me wondering for a bit. Good job
03/14/11
cute little piece. the "voice" of the MC did not really seem bitter despite the title. i was wondering at first if it was a handicapped person but your twist was clever.
the dog seemed to be amused and perplexed rather than bitter.