The Official Writing Challenge
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03/03/11
You have "caught the bug" for sure! Great writing. Nice flow. Keep up the good work!
03/03/11
I loved the flow and content of the piece. I'm glad you didn't give up; I can't wait to read more.
03/04/11
Great patter, loved the pace. You might consider avoiding exclamations - more than one in an essay is tiring. Overall, I enjoyed the piece. Keep writing.
03/04/11
Good stream-of-consciousness here. I was a little visually overwhelmed by the continual ellipses, but nice concept for this topic.
03/04/11
great thoughts like a free form stream of consciousness. i too found the ... distracting but i didnt mind the exclamation marks!! :-)
03/05/11
Wow! You really caught a writers dilemma! Even if we are not real writers, we experience very similar thoughts! You did a great job.
I enjoyed your "patter." I love how you're looking toward marketing when you have two whole pages finished--must be an optimist.
03/07/11
I love this piece!!....I loved those too. Lol!!!! and those too!! Wow, this to me, is a winner!! I have felt this every time I wake up with a story, write, re-write, proofread, on, and on, and on! Clever, and well wriiten.
I'm glad you're getting some deserving good feedback here.

I also felt the ...'s were a bit distracting, but that's easily fixed.

One thing to keep in mind, since FaithWriters publishes some of these- there shouldn't be any reference to the "challenge" or "faithwriters" in the piece.

Keep up the good work :)
03/09/11
This really does capture the somewhat "scatty" nature of, well at least me, and I'm sure many others 'creatives' out there. Whilst the ...s were a bit distracting, I feel they helped to show the thoughts jumping around (not sure if that's what you were going for, but that's how I read it). Well done!
Liked it. The ...I found was good as that is the way I read it. That is the thoughts jumping around in a writers head.It is time consuming when a writer needs to think about what to write on a particular topic.Sometimes easy sometimes not.
Congratulations for placing 8th in level one!