The Official Writing Challenge
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02/19/11
aww this is so well told... i feel for that young person... i hope she/he gets to stay for a good length of time somewhere that is truely home
02/23/11
Edit the passive sentences throughout. The girl didn’t specify why she was so hasty to depart. Your spelling is very good. Worthy portrayal of youth and the hounding need to be all grown; not realizing blessings at hand. Enjoyable read. Blessings. :)
This is the sad truth for far too many kids. Congratulations for placing 8th in level one.