The Official Writing Challenge
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Captivating writing; good job. I was carried along the waves and sensed every emotion. Wonderful. Might want to leave an extra space between paragraphs for easier reading. Keep writing!
great writing some lovely descriptions of life as riding the ocean wave that you kept consistent throughout and built up like the pounding emotions.
so we think the new era that you describe is one of your girls leaving the nest and making their own way in life and then it all changes to the loss of your child.
As I lost my eldest daughter when she was just 17 in 2008 i can relate to this story and it rings as true as a bell.
I dont know if it is fictional or a true story but in a way that is irrelevant. you engage the reader.
i have written a poem about my daughter which makes reference to seastorms called "rainbows through the rain" which i could let you have if you are interested.
I agree with the commentator that if you space your writing it will make it easier for the reader.content alone should make this a winner!
I believe loosing a child is one of the worst experiences a parent could have.

Touching portrayal of this time in your life.

I only have one small suggestion, please double space between paragraphs. It makes it much easier to read. I learned this lesson myself a couple of weeks ago.

congratulations a well deserved second place. you will soon be in the next level i am sure :-)
Congratulations on your second placing, what a powerful story.