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This is a good story. You touched on a difficult topic. Almost everyone knew someone whose life has been changed by suicide.

My biggest suggestion would be to use contractions to make the dialog more natural.

But you did a good job relating to the reader.
01/30/11
This is a great reunion story. So many shared memories of hard times but great faith in the days ahead. Please be sure to proofread your work. I read mine aloud to catch errors or have a friend check. It's hard sometimes to catch our own mistakes. Good job!
01/31/11
good reunion piece. I would have liked a bit more description of the two people and a little less dialogue.
01/31/11
A touching reunion, even though you both grew up in such difficult childhood situations.

I am happy that your circumstances lead both of you to a closer walk with God.