The Official Writing Challenge
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01/20/11
It nice to know that even the 'ugly' things of life 'can' change. Lots of information in your story. Beautiful story of this woman's love and your love for her.

What a beautiful story of how decent adults should reach out to needy children. I loved your charactery and could relate to them.
01/24/11
a very interesting story and some great descriptive phrases. Susan was clearly a "fairy godmother"to this youngster.I would of liked more description of Susan herself within this, as there was alot of the things she did to help the author but little about her.
i suppose this is because it is written from the teenagers perspective in the first person.
You kept my interest from the start through the end. I enjoy stories that demonstrate what a difference we can make without becoming overly contrived. Well done!
01/27/11
This is great! You have a real talent for describing the friendships and the things we can glean from them. Sometime I would like to hear more specifics about one or two of those incidents (like the origin of that banana saying). You've peaked my interest, that's for sure. (Smile) Keep it up!
Congratulations on ranking 14th in level one.