The Official Writing Challenge
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01/20/11
great writing. I dont think i read part one but this story stands well on its own :-)
it is a gripping tale and so sad because of course nowadays these conditions can be diagnosed and cured so easily...
i dont know if it is a true story but either way it rings so true.
01/20/11
Sounds like life is hard in S. Dakota. A very touching story. Thanks for sharing.
01/20/11
I bet life was difficult in South Dakota during that time. I lost a brother, so I understand that even time doesn't take away all the pain.

Well written.
You did a great job building the suspense, I found myself holding my breath. Today, surgery would've likely saved little Dolly,I like how you move the lesson into the story.

Congratulations for ranking 10th among all level one entries!