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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Once in a Blue Moon (01/06/11)

TITLE: Snow Day
By Sharon Brooks
01/13/11


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Snow Day

Jeremy gazed out the window transfixed by the winter wonderland unfolding
before him. Mom dutifully cleared up the breakfast dishes and prepared
lunches for the day. The sweet scent of French toast hung in the air;
Jeremy’s favorite. Nootka and Toulouse, the family cats, rubbed against
Jeremy’s legs hoping for a morsel of food to descend from the heavens.
Outside the snow was gusting and twirling like mini tornados. Sarah winced
as she looked outside and made a mental note to pack lip balm.

The exuberant nine year old suddenly perked up; “Hey mom, maybe it will
be a snow day and school will be cancelled”. Mom sighed and looked into
her son’s hopeful eyes. “Jeremy… mom started, there has never been a snow
day in all the years you’ve attended Highview…that’s just something that
happens once in a blue moon.”

Always ready to demonstrate his superior intellect, Jeremy reminded her,
“But blue moons do happen mom, we learned about it in science…just not
very often. I’m thinking that since there hasn’t been a snow day in seven
years of school that I’m about due.” It was hard to argue with his logic, in
fact it was pointless, because Jeremy could argue black was white until the
point where you weren’t so sure anymore.

“Anything’s possible mom, you just have to have faith…right?” he flashed a
crooked smile. Using mom’s own words against her, now that was fighting
dirty! Blushing, Sarah replied, “Go brush your teeth smart guy”. He
skipped off upstairs undefeated. Jeremy has such a great attitude towards
school Sarah thought proudly. His attendance was perfect for the past three
years running with the exception of the time he had his appendix out. Sarah
gazed out the window. She found herself wishing for a snow day as well.

It was a Tuesday, the day Sarah worked as a dental hygienist from ten until
five. It was a schedule that allowed her to spend a leisurely morning with
Jeremy and his sixteen year old sister Amelia. On this day however, Amelia
was on a school ski trip to Mount Tremblant in Quebec. As the children
grew older one on one time with them grew more and more rare.
Sarah realized that the advice older moms gave her to “Enjoy your kids now,
they grow up too fast!” was coming true.




With apprehension, Sarah phoned the dental office where she worked. Past
experience told her that the receptionist would be franticly trying to fill last
minute cancellations due to the weather. Sarah was clever enough to have
insisted on a clause in her contract guaranteeing her four hours of pay,
regardless of cancellations. This made the receptionist even more frantic;
“I can’t pull people out of thin air to fill these holes in the schedule!” Jenny
would protest.

As expected, Jenny’s voice grew tight as she realized Sarah was calling to
check on her schedule. “Well have you looked out the window? I was
twenty minutes late today myself! Everybody’s canceling and Dr. Watt is
going to have my head.” Jenny struck back.

“Jenny, Sarah said calmly, why don’t I take some of the stress off and stay
home today…I have some projects here that really need attention”.
“REALLY?” The relief in Jenny’s voice was palpable. “Oh that would be
awesome. I’ll see you tomorrow. Your schedule is double booked so wear
your running shoes!” “Sounds good,” Sarah replied as she smiled.

Sarah stood in the kitchen for a moment thinking of all the things she could
get accomplished once Jeremy set off for school. It had been a “month of
Sundays” since she last had a day to herself. She then headed to the bottom
of the stairs and proclaimed in her biggest booming mom voice…
“SNOW DAY!”


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/13/11
There's nothing quite as wonderful as a snow day. I loved your characters, especially the precocious little boy. Double check your punctuations semi-colons VS commas,and quotation marks. But other than those little minor things the story was a pure delight. You really made the characters come to life.
diana kay01/14/11
YAY snow days ! we have had a few of those in England recently too and in the south where it is quite unusual. My 16 yr old daughter still bounces up and down with excitement when school is cancelled. thanks for the lovely topical story
Lillian Rhoades 01/15/11
What an appropriate entry for the season. I wish I could say our snow days are once in a blue moon. Although your title focused on a cold winter day, your story was warm and brought back memories of more than a blue moon snow days of my childhood. I couldn't tell in the story if Jeremy also had a snow day. If so, Sarah's excitement was an atypical reaction most Moms have when school's closed. There's usually a "Snow, Oh No" response:-)
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/20/11
Congratulations for placing in the top 10 of level 1!