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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Once in a Blue Moon (01/06/11)

TITLE: Bud
By Ken Ebright
01/10/11


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The men's Tuesday night Bible study group broke up after the closing prayer. Bud was first to speak, “It's hard being poor. My finances are so tight, that I rarely can go out to eat with you guys. The Lord blessed me with extra money this month, and I can join you guys at Perkins.”

Pastor Greg smiled, “That’s great, you'll get to meet a few of the people we have been praying for,” said Pastor Greg as they walked out the door of the church.



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They arrived at Perkins and sat down at their table. Pastor Greg sat next to Bud.

Pastor opened the menu for a second, then put it down,

“If you were able be here regularly you would know Dick. A person we are praying for usually comes here after work. He is single, never married, and is searching. We want to lead him to the Lord.”

Then Shirley, their waitress came over to take their order.

“Bud, this is Shirley, Shirley, this is Bud, one of the men in our group.”

Shirley shook Bud's hand, “Hey Bud, it is nice to meet you.”

Bud gave a big smile, “It is good to finally meet you. I would come here more often, but I just don’t have the money to come here on a regular basis. We have been praying for your baby.”

Shirley almost started to cry, “Ohhhhhh, Thank you, it did not look good at first, but your prayers were answered. I had a happy healthy baby. I just got back from maternity leave.”

Since people were still deciding, she came back later.

Then Dick walked in and stopped by the table.

“Dick, I want you to meet Bud; he is a member of our group,” said pastor as he finished drinking a glass of water.

Dick put out his hand, “Hey Bud, nice to meet you.”

Bud smiled as he shook Dick's hand, “It is good to meet you too, Dick.”

Pastor interrupted, “We are trying to show Dick that Jesus does love him and he needs him as his savior.”

Bud's face turned serious, “Dick, I have had lots of struggles in life. The Lord has been there for me and

I know he can help you with whatever you may be facing.”

“Your name again is Bud?” asked Dick.

“Yes,” Bud answered.

Dick shook his head as he stood by Bud, “I just don’t know about this Jesus. I can’t believe in an invisible God.”

Bud rose his voice and made eye contact, “Dick, he is real; he has meet all of my needs and he can do the same for you.”

Dick started to walk away, “I am sorry, I am hungry, I need to eat.”

Pastor sighed, “You have met a few of the people were praying for. We have to keep praying for Dick; I know that he can be reached.”

Bud had a sad look on his face,“I wish I had the money to come here more often. I know I could change lives.”

Pastor smiled, The Lord knows your financial situation. You can pray that the Lord gives us the words in you place.”

Their dinner came and Bud prepared to eat. “Maybe, I can.”


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diana kay01/13/11
an interesting story. it felt a little disjointed but found Bud an interesting and likeable character.It would of been great if the group had decided to shared and let Bud join them regularly he sounds like a very good person to have on "the team"
i felt the ending went a bit flat but loved the story.
Lillian Rhoades 01/13/11
I liked your story. Even though the plot was weak, the bare bones are there with potential for a good story.

I would suggest you read more stories with dialogue to improve your writing in that area. Parts of your dialogue were a bit "stiff" and unrealistic.

Ex:Dick started to walk away, “I am sorry, I am hungry, I need to eat.”

I'd also suggest you check your writing for grammar and word usage. Ex: You wrote "rose his voice" for raised his voice. And, were for we're.

Keep writing... and reading
Marita Vandertogt01/14/11
Prayer is important, but so is being the agent God can use to make prayer work. The group didn't seem to see an obvious need right in front of them. Great message and reminder to keep our eyes open to the needs right around us.
Verna Mull01/15/11
I would have liked to see Bud have just the right words that would have really reached the one they were trying to reach, and maybe a close relationship as the result,in spite of Bud's financial status. Good story, however.