The Official Writing Challenge
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01/13/11
awww a sweet story with a... well surprising ending somehow but perhaps a realistic one... i must say i was not aware that the initial story was set in Guyana till later in the piece... just threw me a little. but otherwise well crafted and i enjoyed it.
01/13/11
Light and lovely. A little more kick to the conclusion would have made the story less predictable and more "spicey."
01/15/11
I would have liked a bit more background, but a neat little story.