The Official Writing Challenge
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01/13/11
You make excellent, realistic comments about many of the events in life we all experience. There are obvious technical problems with transferring files. Just a few tips: Certain phrases that passs in conversation don't do well when written. Ex: In other words, the fact is. They make your piece awkward and bogged down with extra words that cry out for red ink strike outs.
I've had to learn to get rid of unnecessary words (I tend to want to say it all):-)

I'll send you a PM as per other suggestions.
01/18/11
Wonderful thoughts!
It would help the reader to leave an extra line between paragraphs. I like how you connected this to God's miracles.