The Official Writing Challenge
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WOW! This is awesome! This should be a winner. Great job.
12/23/10
Beautifully done!
12/25/10
This is one of my favorites. YOu did a good job of showing instead of telling and creating suspense. I liked the tone and the conversation between your characters. Great job. Merry Christmas
You did a good job in this retelling of original sin.
12/26/10
Good piece :-) clever but personally, being pernickity, I did not like the name of the "Eve" character. It felt a bit contrived and demeaning.... but there we are.. maybe that was the plan all along.
01/26/11
Well written and engaging plot. The reader feels a part of the seesawing back and forth between the tempter and the victim. You have great writing tools. Look forward to more of your offerings. Shalom :)