The Official Writing Challenge
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10/10/05
What a great take on this topic! I think a little bit of polishing to tighten up the rythm of the poem would make this an EXCELLENT piece. I really like your theme, though - what a great message!
I agree, the structure needs tightening up so that this piece can realise its full potential. Polish it up for an article submission - this is very good. God bless.
10/11/05
Interesting wordwork. Much better than mine of the same theme, I think. I'd like to see more of your poetry. It flows nicely.
I really enjoyed the contrast here. The rhyming rhythm and scheme needs a little work, but it's a very good entry! Thanks for sharing!
Hey, this was great! I enjoyed reading it!
10/16/05
How awesome a thought and how often we use the flowing scheme of plucking petels for our theme..but not so sweet nor complete as God's love conceived of thee. I think I may know the poet--and I also enjoyed the poem richly written. God bless ya!!
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